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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many experts in bilateral issues believe that due to major issues of health, education and trade, some poor nations are suffering enormously. It is my firm belief that Developed nations should contribute their part in solving these major challenges of the world. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate my opinion with appropriate evidences. Every human being on
this
 planet is associated and contributes to each other in spite of geographical locations. Since, economies of affluent nations are
moreover
 dependent on developing or poor nations. Admittedly, population of poor countries like Africa
for instance
 is, blessing in disguise. The manpower is available in a substantial amount, who can contribute to the outsourcing in the technology sector in Europe and North American geographies, where good communications is highly demanded which,
otherwise
 is hard to be managed by these rich nations at a reasonable cost.
As a result
, their economies grow at a much faster pace.
Secondly
, it takes a little effort from both sides but can eventually change their destiny. Since, many underdeveloped nations have a lack of advancement in educational resources, but has enormous potential to be grown many skilled professionals, who can contribute to the economies where manpower is a big challenge owing to ageing populations. So, it is a win win situation for both.
Moreover
, from a humanitarian aspect, if wealthy nations can inculcate little knowledge and wisdom with regards to general health awareness like Hygienics and healthy living, they can contribute to build a healthier planet. To conclude, affluent nations should contribute to the above said issues of impoverished nations with their efforts in terms of dedication and technological resources which in result contributes to their economies too and eventually can help in building a better planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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