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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news on the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past decades,
media
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the media
has never failed
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have never failed
 to draw public attention. While it is argued to be a waste of time, I believe that news has been profoundly influencing people’s life and should not be neglected. On the one hand, there are
few potential drawbacks
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a few potential drawbacks
 if people put all their trust in the news.
Firstly
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, news media
is
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are
 prone to exaggerate the importance of real information to gain high audience ratings, so readers might access a huge amount of irrelevant information.
This
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 caused massive damage to people’s mental states and instilled fear
into
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in
 their minds, which results in shaping readers’ outlook on society in a negative way. Secondary, juvenile delinquency is largely shaped by the violent content, since it appears rampant in online newspapers or magazines. The portrayal of those criminals encourages viewers to emulate violent
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
, so children tend to solve all the conflicts by violence and become aggressive.
On the other hand
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, there are enormous advantages to be gained, which outweigh the disadvantages. In terms of transmits knowledge, the public should take into consideration the fact that reading newspapers or watching television enables us to enrich their knowledge and learn more about almost every area of life, so it assists people in decision making easier.
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 is because it provides its audience members with knowledge about a wide range of topics
such
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 as healthcare, education, technology or politics. From a daily life perspective, by updating constantly up-to-the-minute information about warning offenders, catastrophes or social problems, it might reduce the level of casualties.
For example
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, media provides the latest breaking news about natural disasters
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 as tsunami, earthquakes, and
flood
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the flood
 which makes people be alert and prevent better with organizing evacuations. In conclusion,
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 both views certainly have some
validly
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validity
, it seems to me that people should pay attention to update news incredible sources.
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