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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Discuss the two views and give your own opinion.

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 tells about the old civilisations, their strategies, their way of living, world conflict and the ways people overcame it. So I don't agree that
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 has a little to tell us. The basic characteristics, sufferings, crisis and wit are same for all the ages of the human kind. The way people struggled to achieve a better life in the primitive time is very much similar to the present time. The ways may be
different but
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different, but
 the theme is same and there is lots of evidence that the study of past
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 reviles a new invention to the present people. Though it is true that
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 itself is disputed as it has been written by the winners and sometimes
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 differs from place to place.
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: according to Indian
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, English came to rule the country and had destroyed the peaceful
lifestyle there
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lifestyle, there
 by treachery and cunning
strategies but
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strategies, but
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 the English are heroes and they claim to modernise the Indian. In my opinion,
nonetheless
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 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 invaluable importance to all of us will remain until the end of the human race. How could we know about the great people who had sacrificed their lives for the betterment of the world or those who have cruelly tried to bring suffering for people?
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 tells us a lot about the people of all centuries.
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 suggests the different techniques that can be malevolent or beneficial for a country by presenting practical evidence. Again,
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 tells us about the devastating wars and potentially warns us about the conflict of nations.
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 suggests us about the good and evil and helps us to choose the appropriate way.
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