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Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their educatiok because the opportunities exist for them to do so. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Millenials
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Millennials
, now prefer to be well-educated in comparison to the past. Some people
justifies
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justify
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 by stating that it's the job competition for which they have to study
hard
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hard, however
however
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, others believe that it is because of the numerous opportunities that they have now. I,
nevertheless
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 believes that it is both, the eligibility criteria for jobs and the globally integrated courses which encourages youth to have qualitative
education
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. It is the eligibility criteria which asks for higher
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education even
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education, even
 for a lower vacancy. The companies or organisations these days
demand
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demands
 for lateral thinking skills which can only be attained after clearing minimum basic
education
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.
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, the bar has been set up real high for the vacancies and people with lower grades and
education
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 fails to achieve it.
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, people who are after getting jobs
only consider
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to only consider
 the quantitative aspect of
education
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.
However
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,
in contrast
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 to
this
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, the
education
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 system provides
plethora
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a plethora
 of integrated courses which universalizes the
education
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 and people with
progressive spirit
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a progressive spirit
the progressive spirit
 tend to grab the opportunities as
many
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much
 as they can.
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, considering the qualitative aspect of
education
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.
For example
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, Malala Yousaf, the youngest motivational speaker who talks about
reformation
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the reformation
a reformation
 of the society only through
education
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. Alongside, the availability of the study material now, is quite enormous, updated and authentic.
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, the youth aims at getting
higher and qualitative
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a higher and qualitative education
education
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 and
hence
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, look for integrated courses. In my opinion, the blend of qualitative approach and quantitative approach of
education
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 only, can help our millennials to be young achievers like, Sabeer Bhatia (Indian-American Businessman) founder of hotmail and can provide the exposure which is mandatory to enhance the lateral skills and to draw out the maximum output from the human resource. To conclude, the youth would meet the job demands
if, they get
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, if they get
 the exposure to the integrated educational system.

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