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some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore some certain works are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. do you agree or disagree

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Livelihood in a state where I have to speak
a
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an
 overseas
language
 can cause serious social issues.
However
, I think that any people coming another county should respect national
culture
. In the essays, I would like to outline the social and practical concerns. The social would be a
language
barriers
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barrier
, which mean any other
country
 mighty
be
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to be
is
 a
problem
 to able to speak and understand the
language
 as far as a person who is living
,
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,
 and a person
who came to in
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who came to
 the
country
.
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.
 Another
problem
 is
liked
connected by a link, as railway cars or trailer trucks
linked
 to the
language
 barriers, but it might influence the behaviour or
language
.
For example
, some
culture
 and like English people prefer to be a very politics and say thing differently from other
culture
. The Practical
problem
 would
be misunderstanding of
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be a misunderstanding of
culture
. The
second
problem
 is finding a job. An individual who works in
overseas
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the overseas country
country
 might not be appreciate for people who be serves.
For
example if
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example, if
 an individual works in a restaurant, the people who live in a
country
 and they were born in that
country
 might not respect and not like the behaviour of a person who work in a restaurant, it might be because the
culture
are
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is
 different. In
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
 can be said that there
are
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is
 a lot of misconception which people when they come in a foreign
country
,
Accept space
,
 and in my opinion and from my personal experience people should
educated
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educate
 themselves in order to know how to behave in different situation with different
culture
.
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