In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Actually I

disagree with

this

idea. It is not easy to

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produce

something useful or good.

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; in most countries, people

can not

cannot

reach the

technology

if they are not going to buy a these multinational

companies

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companies'

company's

products

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product

. When you did not reach the

technology

then

you can not

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produce

goods useful for

this

century. Some people say these companies

are just forcing

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are just forced

will just be forced

people to buy their products with advertising. But it is quite normal for me. When

you

of you or yourself

your

product

something useful you have to believe your

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and you should make a huge advertisement.

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one can find and they

can not

cannot

buy your products. I believe that some products are very useful

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example Apple

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example, Apple

is a multinational company and they are

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Apple Watch. When people get

this

watch, they can see their blood pressure, heart health etc. Some of the countries

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an American company

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a Chinese company

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The government

Government

of China is permitted to buy Apple’s products. They are in a

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themselves

product

better goods. Samsung did same watch with Apple and

then

they forced Apple to

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produce

producing

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can not

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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Cheaper airfare has increased air travel in the last decade and it has positive effects on nations as per some while others disagree. Discuss both the views. Give your opinion

plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of air and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?