Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well others say that teachers only teach students academic subjects discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today’s era, schools are turning out students who have a great capacity to use their minds and brain powers, but
lack
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the lack
of a well-grounded sense of moral obligations to others, some claim, teachers should be born responsibility for making pupils well-
disciplined but
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disciplined, but
others hold the view that the phenomenon should be continued,
however
, I believe the position of common sense should be prior option. On the one hand, opponents of well-behaved
sense
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sensible
point role of parents and schools only for academic subjects. Children spend most of their time at home around their family members and parents have always been a role model for them.
For
example normally
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example, normally
children spend two-thirds of their day
besides
their parents. The non-supporters believe that it is
parents’ moral duty
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the parents’ moral duty
a parents’ moral duty
to provide carefree childhood, which can be developed by raising a child in a loving family, for their children. Under these circumstances they might stay on good terms with others. At the same
time teachers
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time, teachers
should develop open-minded and well informant individuals.
Furthermore opponents
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Furthermore, opponents
hold another view
that is
the classroom, not the home, is the ideal place to learn academic subjects and it is
teachers’ responsibility
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the teachers’ responsibility
to teach them a wide diversity of knowledge for future career and study life. They support their opinion by saying that pupils go to school not hearing everyday words about how to behave well but quench their thirst for knowledge.
Conversely
, those who support sharing responsibility think preschool and school a critical time for background and brain development it would be unwise putting all duties on the shoulder of parents. Especially, juveniles get easily influenced by external environment as well as other
peer’s
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peer
pressure.
Thus
,
teacher’s role
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the teacher’s role
for
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in
educating students about distinguishing between right and wrong is bottom line.
For example
, a number of ill-disciplined students are more in USA relative to Uzbekistan because Uzbekistan’s educational system
try
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tries
to keep balance study Life and well behaving with the help of teachers. To sum up,
although
there are convincing arguments to the
contrary I
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contrary, I
believe, in order to produce more desirable result, duty of creating citizens with good conduct and better career prospectus should be shared equally between parents and teachers.
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