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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#rubbish #governments #amount
There is no doubt that
rubbish
 play an important role in environmental pollution and how it affects
in
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on
 our health and our daily life. In these days we are producing an extra
rubbish
 than before and
that is
 a serious problem. In
this
 essay will talk about
this
 problem and what cause it and how to reduce it and what governments should do to make it is levels go down.
lots
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Lots
 of people produce a very massive daily
rubbish
,
that is
 due to lack of knowledge of recycling and not
use
 extra materials in food industries or in
factories we
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factories, we
 need to learn how to get rid of them by a healthy way
also
 the ones that we cannot get rid of them we must educate ourselves on how to recycle them.
Although
 in the
past we
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past, we
 used less
rubbish but
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rubbish, but
 recently we have the ability to reprocess the
un needed
not necessary
unneeded
 resources to make them available to
use
 again through specific factories, once it is done
upcycle
 we can
use
 it again.
Also
 the governments have an important duty towards reduction of these garbage, specific factories need to be made to overcome that highly amount of these scraps, if I were the environmental governor I would take these actions
effectively
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effectual
more effectively
 and make good
use
 of these trashes. Briefly, the people and the
governments both
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governments, both
 have an important job against
this
 important issue that may one day destroy our environment and spread unknown diseases.
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