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some people think that internet has brought people closer together, while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Influence of internet on
society
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 has long been debated. While a significant number of people visualise Facebook as a menace to the
society
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, from my point of view, one should not alienate the progressive impact of community networking sites on humanity in general.
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, pro and cons of Facebook for a civil
society
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 are required to be comprehended in tandem with each other. The critics of these websites point out to the trend that people are prone to get addicted to these applications and
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 losing a significant amount of their productive time.
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, the protestors
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 project that these application
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 an unprecedented and unrestricted access of information and content to anyone at one’s disposal which
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 may be restricted
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 a certain age or contrary to one’s own community guidelines.
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, the old phrase of man is a social animal still holds its true essence. Social networking sites have been using
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 basic evolutionary human characteristics to bring people and communities closer to each other than ever before. Not only these sites are making cultural exchanges between us more accessible, but
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 providing a conducive platform for business to flourish across the globe. Companies ranging from a multi-nationals to a small town self-employed person is booming on the lower cost-high impact marketing model which these sites bring to the table. In conclusion, these social websites have made the
society
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 more closes knit than earlier. While these sites do have certain adverse impacts on
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 as a
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 of their vast public reach,
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 we cannot isolate the ground breaking progress of our
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 that these sites have been able to offer to us.
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