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Some people think that money must be spent on promoting the use of bicycles in cities while others think cities must spend on public transport discuss both views and give your opinion

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People have distinct views about whether finance should be utilised on motivating the usage of bicycles or on
other mode
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other modes
 of public transport like buses trains in urban areas. And, according to me both the ideas are acceptable. On the one hand, supporting the idea of spending money on influencing the utilisation of bicycles as it encourages people for
such
 vehicles.
to
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To
 illustrate, insisting the masses to use more and more bicycles is likely to influence them due to which majority of individuals will use bicycles and give up their motorised vehicles which operate on fossil fuels
also
 release harmful toxic pollutants to the environment
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, through
such
compaign
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
campaigns
,
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,
people will enjoy
Healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
a Healthy lifestyle
.
according
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According
 to medical
experts
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expert
 cycling is the best form of exercise which not only keep
fit but
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fit, but
also
 avoid from fatal heart related ailments
.
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.
On the other hand
, I
also
 consider investing money
on
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in
 stimulating public transportation
this
 is because
this
plural of "this"
these
 modes travelling of is efficient.
people
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People
 in
engage
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engaging
 with their work and study and they want to reach their destination
on
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in
 proper time Since
such
 transport
system
 is a faster, people can reach their workplace quickly and save large amount of time.
in
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In
 addition to
this
, increasing the traffic conditions would be
deterted
try to prevent; show opposition to
deterred
detected
distorted
 by spending
monetary
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money
monies
moneys
 on the
this
 type of transportation facility.
Increased number
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An increased number
The increased number
 of private vehicles which are used by
masses
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the masses
 for their commuting with which Traveller have to face Road gems if people travelling
system improve
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system, improve
 like appropriate roads, availability of air conditioner, individuals will select buses and trains to travel and leave their own vehicles and
this
system
 play a significant role in traffic reduction. To sum up, according to me, along with bicycles promotion money must
also
 be invested
on
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in
 public transport
system
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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