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SOME PEOPLE DO NOT ALLOW CHILDREN TO PARTICIPATE IN GAMES’ SPORTS OR COMPETITIONS UNLESS EVERYONE GETS A PRIZE. OTHERS THINK THAT CHILDREN MUST LEARN TO DEAL WITH WINNING OR LOSING IN ORDER TO BE FULLY PREPARED FOR LIFE.DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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It is true that each and every parent must have to take care of the upbringing of children in the competitive world.The majority of the parents never give permission to their child to take part in activities unless they reward with gifts.Whilst others believe that children must have to accept failure and success to deal with their upcoming future life.Before stating my view the essay shall analyse both the perspective in the ensuing paragraphs. While considering the foremost view a majority of parents thinks that if their children would not be provided present at any events, it might be possible that the moral would break.
In addition
 to that each and every child renders their best efforts to win the challenge,
however
 if they fail to gain appreciation at the end of activities their confidence might be gradually decreased and they lose interest as long as they fail.
For example
, in many school children categorised based on the achievement they gain and sometimes they might feel inferior if they fail to win the competition.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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