Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The rate at which crimes are happening all across the world has risen. Whether it is due to poverty, social problems or a result of an

individuals

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individual

individual's

negative psychology

are

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primarily the aspects contributing to the thefts, murders, blackmailing and more. In

this

essay I will discuss both the sides and share my opinion.

Firstly

, individuals who land up

commiting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

such

sinful acts are mostly due to problems in their sustainability and the desire to survive.

For instance

, recently -- a domestic help looted the house she worked at to pay

from a particular thing or place or position

off

her daughter's dowry.

Secondly

, their personal life conditions are so miserable that they feel no shame or guilt in doing so because they have no other way out.

Finally

, social issues and monetary helplessness lead to several crimes.

On the other hand

, a person's negative nature cannot be a strong enough reason to commit

such

life threatening blunders. At times, a person is mentally facing certain challenges which may lead him to commit certain crimes. To exemplify, a serial killer, who recently got caught, would abduct children and

then

kill them purely out of pleasure.

However

this

is fortunately a rare scenario and one must be psychologically very disturbed to perform

such

acts. To conclude, I strongly believe that it is the bad consequences that makes an individual do wrong things. Even though bad nature of a person can do

such

acts but

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acts, but

it takes much more than just the nature to commit

such

activities.

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