Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The rate at which crimes are happening all across the world has risen. Whether it is due to poverty, social problems or a result of an

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individual

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negative psychology

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primarily the aspects contributing to the thefts, murders, blackmailing and more. In

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essay I will discuss both the sides and share my opinion.

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, individuals who land up

commiting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

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sinful acts are mostly due to problems in their sustainability and the desire to survive.

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, recently -- a domestic help looted the house she worked at to pay

from a particular thing or place or position

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her daughter's dowry.

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, their personal life conditions are so miserable that they feel no shame or guilt in doing so because they have no other way out.

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, social issues and monetary helplessness lead to several crimes.

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, a person's negative nature cannot be a strong enough reason to commit

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life threatening blunders. At times, a person is mentally facing certain challenges which may lead him to commit certain crimes. To exemplify, a serial killer, who recently got caught, would abduct children and

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kill them purely out of pleasure.

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is fortunately a rare scenario and one must be psychologically very disturbed to perform

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acts. To conclude, I strongly believe that it is the bad consequences that makes an individual do wrong things. Even though bad nature of a person can do

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acts but

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acts, but

it takes much more than just the nature to commit

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activities.

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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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