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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree or with this

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Jobs consume more than 30% of our daily time. As some believe that the main aim of each employee should be work directed rather than building a beneficial peer relationship. In my opinion, achieving both a coworker relationship and
exceling
distinguish oneself
excelling
 in the job should be done simultaneously. On one hand, acquiring a healthy
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 has many personal and productivity related benefits.
Firstly
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, employees in good terms usually assist each other,
thus
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, more productivity.
Secondly
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, a workplace full of support and less personal grudges,
does not only improves
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has not only improved
 the
workers
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workers'
 mood, but
also
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 enhances their outcomes.
Such
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 gains from a healthy peer
relatioships
a relation between people; ('relationship' is often used where 'relation' would serve, as in 'the relationship between inflation and unemployment', but the preferred usage of 'relationship' is for human relations or states of relatedness)
relationships
 has numerous benefits.
On the other hand
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, being target directed in jobs has various upsides.
To begin
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 with, giving more time on job tasks
instead
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 of
wastening
any general reduction in vitality and strength of body and mind resulting from a debilitating chronic disease
wasting
 time on other activities can improve
employees
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employees'
employee's
 career,
hence
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, being recognized by
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 owners as a hard worker.
Such
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focused directed
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focused, directed
 job has a positive result on each worker career. To conclude, balancing a healthy peer relationship without being distracted from their work will result
into
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in
 the best outcome.

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