SOME PEOPLE FEEL THAT THERE SHOUD BE A FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR EACH TYPE OF CRIME. OTHERS FOT THAT THE CIRUMSTANCES OF AN OFFENCE SHOULD BE TAKEN IN TO ACCOUNT WHEN DECIDING ON A PUNISHMENT. DISCUSS BOTHE SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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It is irrefutable that crimes are burgeoning day by day in every country. An army of masses

think

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thinks

that

punishment

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should be fixed for all

kind

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kinds

of crimes. While, some people believe that circumstances should be analysed behind

crime

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the crime

till decide the

punishment

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. I think that situations should be

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consider

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considered

before

punishment

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. I will discuss both view in

upcoming paragraphs

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the upcoming paragraphs

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with, there are multifarious reasons that some people said fixed

punishment

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should be given to all

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kinds

of criminal activities. The

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and for most reason is that crimes would be reduced.

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then

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than

people afraid to do crimes in their life.

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constitution

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the constitution

of the county would be strong. Due to

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, reason development of nation can be seen and nation would become safe.

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, looking towards reasons and situations of offender to give

punishment

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necessary

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necessary, for instance, if

necessary, for instance if

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, if a culprit

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does

snatching

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snatching, then

snatching them

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government

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the government

should look the situation of his house that criminal belong from

poor family

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a poor family

that is

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why he is attempting snatching activity. In

this

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case, given capital or fixed

punishment

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is not good

punishment

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. Government should give a chance to criminal to realise his mistake.

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, some time minor crimes are one

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with

children

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children, such

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as, firing in a crowded place which harm to public it does not mean

government

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the government

will give fixed

punishment

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to children because children are not enough mature in early age they do not know about

outcomes

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the outcomes

of firing in public place. To conclude, not only positive results of fixed

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punishment but

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punishment, but

has

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have

detrimental effects

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on criminal’s life.

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why government should not fix

punishment

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for all kind of crimes

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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