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the use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places and so mobile phone should also be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#phone #places
in
Suggestion
In
this
 technological Era the usage of mobile phones in many places becomes implied is smoking. Some people believe that
cell
 phones should be prohibited
at
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in
 some places. I totally agree with
cell
Suggestion
cell phone bans
the cell phone ban
phone
 ban in
decided
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deciding
 places and following essay, I will state my opinion based on facts and example.
to
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To
 begin with
cell
 phones keep us in touch with our loved ones, families and friends and its impact on social behaviour of people is enormous.
people
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People
 are using their mobile phones more than ever. Mobile
phone
 users spend most of their time in
socialisingwith
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socialising with
 others on communication platform
such
 as WhatsApp Skype Instagram
instead
 of personal contact with other human beings.
This
 habit causes social anxiety which has been proven by many researches and likely leads to aggressive behaviour.
secondly
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Secondly
, it is a true fact that smoking is injurious to health
never the less
despite anything to the contrary (usually following a concession)
nevertheless
, scientists prove global impact to all parts of
human body
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the human body
, using mobile phones
kills
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to kill
 people suddenly than cigarettes. Brilliant example
for
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of
this
 statement is using
cell
 phones during driving can cause petrol car accidents.
Also
, while taking selfies and photographs from high rise
building
Accept comma addition
building, then
then
 from
bridge
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the bridge
.
however I
Accept comma addition
However, I
However I
 believe that mobile
phone
have
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has
 many advantages,
such
 as for contacting others through mobile
phone
 are very useful in emergency situation like when people see robbery when and they can call the police immediately.
Also they
Accept comma addition
Also, they
 can read
newspaper
Suggestion
newspapers
a newspaper
the newspaper
 from
cell
 phones and can order the mail from their phones to eat. But excessive use of mobile
phone
 in many places and its negative effect neglect all these advantages of
cell
 phones.
to
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To
 sum up I strongly agree with applying
rules
Suggestion
the rules
 of mobile
phone
 usage in public places because many people do not think through
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 negative effect our mental and body health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • antisocial
  • social interactions
  • negative impacts
  • banning
  • regulated
  • completely banned
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • responsible
  • mobile phone use
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