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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, many employers are encouraging their staff to have a dress code in the workplace. The main benefit of a fixed outfit is that it is a promotional item for the
organization
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 the drawback is the boredom of wearing the same thing regularly. In my opinion, the dress code should be appreciated at the place of work
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 its positive effects. One of the major benefits of wearing common attire is that it acts as an advertisement for the company. That means,
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 workers
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 wearing an
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 apparel, they promote and create an impression for that company by grasping the attention of the consumer.
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, the logo and emblem that are attached to the garment
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 provide the message of the company.
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, having a fixed outfit facilitates a business institution
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 either by creating a brand image or promoting the product, which
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 in more sales and profit generation.
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, people can easily identify the employees of KFC, which is one of the renowned restaurants, by the red
costume
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 they wear.
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, putting on the same costume every day seems a bit mundane for some people. They think everyone has a different fashion sense
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 relates to their comfort
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 personality.
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, having the same apparel could create an uninteresting environment at the workplace as the employees are not allowed to
expose
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 their styles.
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, the dressing should be based on individual interests.
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, a recent survey conducted by Monster.com has revealed that the workers
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apply
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 who have freedom of clothing
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 are more spontaneous compared to
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those
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 who have a code for clothing. In conclusion,
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uniform
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 allows exposing the business, it creates an uninteresting working environment.
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, if
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 little discomfort can be overlooked, the advantage will seem the greatest strength for the business progression.

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task
Make your main view clear in the first paragraph and keep to it.
structure
Use a 4-part layout: intro, point for, point against, short end.
lexical
Use plain words and short sentences. Fix long or hard words or odd spellings.
grammar
Fix errors like 'workers steps wearing' to 'when workers wear' and 'organization’s apparel' to 'the company’s clothes'.
task
Give more detail to each point so your reason is strong.
coherence
Use linking words to tie ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.
content
You show a clear view and talk on both sides.
examples
You use examples like KFC and a flag from a survey to back points.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unity
  • team spirit
  • dress code
  • professional appearance
  • confidence
  • clients
  • brand identity
  • recognizable
  • individuality
  • personal expression
  • uncomfortable
  • impractical
  • financial burden
  • resistance
  • dissatisfaction
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