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The percentage of overweight children in Western society has increased by almost 20% in the last 10 years. Discuss the causes and effects of this trend.

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I am writing to express my interest in working at our company main office, in Australia for a six month to attending cloud based training sessions and enhance my skills around hosting application through cloud. As you know, I have been recently promoted to Tech Lead post in the software development team. As a Tech Lead I have
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a number
 of responsibilities to cover. Among them one of most significant thing is grabbing new technology into our product and release more productive creation to consumer.
Hence I
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Hence, I
 would like to get an opportunity to attend training sessions which
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frequently arrange
 at our head office. I
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have already spoken
 to Poornima (associate tech lead) and she has agreed to take my responsibilities during my absence.
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Furthermore, I
 will check my emails daily and will be available for emergency calls. I would be grateful if you could support me to get approvals from CEO by giving
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a recommendation
recommendations
. I look forward to receiving your positive response.

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