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It is difficult to experience a country fully as a tourist in a hotel. To appreciate and understand a country, a person needs to live there. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People are travelling more today than ever before.
However
, short term visitors simply do not have the
time
 needed to fully understand a
country
. I agree that to truly experience and appreciate a
country
 a person needs to live there for a period longer than that of the typical tourist.
This
 will be shown by looking at how knowledge of a
country
’s customs and language, two cornerstones to understanding any nation in depth, requires
time
 to be developed. For one, to understand a
country
’s values and beliefs, a person must be exposed to its customs, a process that demands
time
.
For example
, while living in the UAE, I had the privilege of attending a local wedding, a traditional camel race, and a birthday with my Emirati friend. In the cool of the late evening at each of these events, guests were served spiced camel meat and
medjool
Suggestion
Medjool
 dates, staple foods that sustained generations of people in
such
 barren landscape. Had I only been visiting the UAE as a tourist, I would not have had the
time
 needed to have
such
 insights into Emirati cuisine and lifestyle.
Thus
, living in a
country
 is a necessary precursor to fully experience it. Language is yet another avenue through which so much understanding can be derived. While living in China,
for instance
, I managed to pick up the basics of the Chinese language. Among other things,
this
 allowed me to see that Chinese culture puts extreme emphasis on
thr
definite article
the
 face.
For instance
, in China it is the custom to refuse a gift several times before accepting. As I could only make
this
 fundamental observation after committing
time
 to learning the language, it is clear that a
country
 really does need to be lived in to be fully appreciated. To conclude,
although
 tourists receive a basic introduction to a region and its peoples, thorough understanding of a
country
 is best achieved when one commits to living there.
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