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Today, more and more tourists re visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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DUE TO INCREASE IN NUMBER OF TRAVELERS, SOME PLACES
SUCH
 AS SAHARA DESERT AND THE ANTARCTICA HAVE IMPLIMENTED A VEGOROUS RULES FOR VISITORS SO THAT ENVIRONMENTAL DAMAGE TO THE ENVIRONMENT WILL BE DECLINED.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS PROS AND CONS RELATED TO THE VISITORS DURING AND AFTER VISITING
THIS
 KIND OF PLACES. ON THE ONE HAND, VISITING THE HARD COUNTRY LIKE SOUDI ARABIA HAS A MAJOR POSTIVE IMPACT ON THE TOURIST REGARDING THE RESPECT OF THE WOMEN'S DIGNITY. DURIING THE VISIT, PEOPLE LEARNS HOW ONE WOMAN GAIN RESPECT AND PROECTED BY HER HUSBAND.
THIS
 LEADS TO INCREASE THE KNOWLEDGE ABOUT THE WOMEN SAFETY AND SECURITY.
FOR EXAMPLE
, 602 OF THE SOUTHERN PART OF INDIA LIVES THERE AND THEY BRING
THIS
 CULTURE TO INDIA.
HENCE
, THE WOMEN SAFETY INCREAS BY 50% IN COMPARISPON TO
LAST
 DECADE.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, THE CONS OF VISITING
SUCH
 AREA IS THAT INDIVIDUAL UNABLE TO ENJOY FULLY AS THEY THE RISTRICTIONS REFRAIN THEIR SOME ACTIVITIES LIKE HANGING OUT FREELY AROUND THE CITY.
THIS
 LEADS TO WASTE THEIR MIONEY AND TIME WHO CAME TO RELAX AND ENJOY WITH THIER FAMILY. DUE TO
SUCH
 CONSEQUENCES, FAMILY TRIP END UP WITH SOME PERSONAL STRESS AND UNFULFILLMENT AND AT SOME POINT THEY MAIGHT BE SEPERATEED FROM EACHOTHER. FOE INSTANCE, 80% OF THE INDIAN FAMILY UNSATISFIED WITH THE SHORT TRIP TO SOME RESTRICTED COUNTRIES DUE TO VEGOROUS LAWS.
HOWEVER
,
THIS
 KIND OF COUNTRIES HAVE
SUCH
 LAWS TO PROTECT THE NATION THTA IS INDEED REQUIREMENT. EVERY TERRITORY HAS RIGHT TO IMPLIMENT THE CONVENIENT RULES SO THAT THE CIVILIAN CAN LIVE THEIR LIFE PEACEFULLY. IN CONCLUSION, NO TERRITORY IS WRONG WITH HE HARDNESS IN THE RULES FOR OUTSODERS.
NONETHELESS
, TOURIST SHOULD THINK ND FOLLOW THE CULTURE AND TRADITION OF THE PLACE FOR THE TIME THEY STAY THERE.
THIS
 LEAVES AN IMMANCE IMPACT ON THE LOCAL PEOPLE AND ENCOURAGED TO INVITE MORE TOURIST TO VISITE THIER COUNTRY.
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