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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make. Has this become a positive or negative development?

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It is true that due to cutting edge
technology
 people totally depend on electronic gadgets like laptop, mobile phone which are helpful for them
.
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.
Because of
technology
individuals
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individuals'
 interaction has been changed as well as it
also
 affect on
people relationship
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the person's relationship
person's relationship
a person's relationship
. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
has became
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has become
 positive development.
To begin
 with, in
thesedays
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these days
 people
start
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are starting
communicate
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communicating
 with the help of
technology which
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technology, which
 is cheap and time saving as well as
it
it is
it's
best way
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the best way
 for interaction.
Moreover
, it
also
 affect on education. Due to
technology
 learner showed more interest in their academic and obtain
best rank
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the best rank
. Apart from
this
technology
 very important for business purposes because with the help of
technology
 employer easily dealing with other nation companies without face to face interaction.
Finally
, due to
technology
 peo
ple enh
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changing
ance their relationship
wi
it is
it's
th other nations people and
also
 know
the
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much
 language and culture of these countries To sum up,
technology
 has been changed the life of people and it helpful for business, education and many more

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