The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries
The line graph highest
illustrate
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amount
of Use synonyms
water
used globally from 1900 to 2000, Use synonyms
by
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the table shows the Linking Words
water
consumption rate between Use synonyms
Brazil
and Congo in 2000 and it includes, the number of people and space occupied by these people in square Use synonyms
km
.
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Overall
, there was a general Linking Words
increase
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water
usage for agriculture, industry and domestics. Use synonyms
However
, agriculture used plenty of Linking Words
water
above Use synonyms
other
2 categories. Correct article usage
the other
Brazil
had a bigger population which occupied vast Use synonyms
space
of land and consumed Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
large
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a large
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amounts
water
compared to Congo.
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the
increase
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usage
of Change preposition
in usage
water
by agriculture from 1900 to 2000, which saw an Use synonyms
increase
from approximately Use synonyms
500cubic
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500 cubic
km
in 1900 to about 3000 cubic Use synonyms
km
in 2000. Industrial and domestic services used an equal Use synonyms
amount
of Use synonyms
water
from 1900 to 1920, at an estimated 0.1 cubic Use synonyms
km
. From 1920, domestics remained constant in average Use synonyms
water
usage, until 1950, when it rose steadily to about 300 cubic Use synonyms
km
in 2000, Use synonyms
while
industries had a gradual Linking Words
increase
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,
when it fluctuated dramatically to approximately 1000 cubic Remove the comma
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km
in 2000.
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Furthermore
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Brazil
had a large population of 176 million which occupied 26.500km and consumed Use synonyms
large
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a large
amount
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water
, at 359 cubic metres. DRC had the least number of people compared to Use synonyms
Brazil
, living in a small piece of land of 100 square Use synonyms
km
and Use synonyms
consumption
rate was 8 cubic metres per person for the whole year.Correct article usage
the consumption
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