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Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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information about
 how children travelled to and from school in the years 1990 and 2010. The modes of transport are car, walking, cycling, walking and by bus and by bus only. During 1990, walking was the main way of transportation to and from school taken by 12 millions of children. Car passenger, cycling, walking and bus were other possibilities to get to school, but not so frequency with around 4 to 7 millions of children.
However
, by 2010, car passenger trips numbers rose and became the actual leader with a total of 11
millions
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million
 trips per year made by the kids. It is evidence that the society started to give more importance to the new ways of moving, brought with the evolution of technology. A
more detail
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more detailed
 look at the graphs, permit us to see that between 1990 and 2010 the numbers fell
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 almost half,
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to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 in the walking sectors.
Although
 there was a down, cars, which were the least common way of moving in 1990, became the most popular in 2010. Cleary, there were a significant growth in the car passenger numbers and a decrease in the other sections. The
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