Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, others think this is not responsibility of schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by individuals that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
of
education center
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the education centre
education centre
that they teach youngsters for their
health but
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health, but
some think that it is
responsiblity
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the responsibility
responsibility
of parents. But I
am agree
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agree
this
statement and I discuss my view in upcoming paragraph.
To begin
with, there are many
reason
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reasons
why
school
teach
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teaches
is taught
to younger students about their
health
.
First
and foremost is that if
school
teach
then
they understand easily and many subjects are tech them which are related to their
health
.
Moreover
, parents are busy
in
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with
their hectic schedule as well as most of the is spent in
school
by children. So they can learn more things about their
health
and how take care their
health
.
Moreso
, if
school
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the school
a school
teach
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teaches
about
health
then
young adults learn from different tutors and gain more knowledge about their
health
. In many education
center
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centres
centre
Center
do experience compulsory
in
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at
morning
time which
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time, which
is very helpful
students
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students'
student
health
as well as science is best subjects for students to learn deeply about human
health
. With these
type
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types
of subject learner know about different types of disease and which food is healthy for
themself
objective case of they
them
themselves
To sum up,
school
is
best
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the best
place where young adult learn about their
health
and become responsible. So it is the responsibility of
government
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the government
that they provide more
aminents
standing above others in quality or position
eminent
in
education center
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the education centre
education centre
for
health
purposes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutritional education
  • Childhood obesity
  • Diet-related illnesses
  • Physical fitness
  • Sedentary lifestyles
  • Mental health education
  • Destigmatize
  • Coping mechanisms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Information overload
  • Holistic approach
  • Well-rounded individuals
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