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In the past most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers the internet and smartphones, more and more are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays, telecommuting is becoming increasingly popular, because of modern technologies.
However
, there are both pros and cons. In
this
 essay I will discuss some of the advantages and disadvantages of working at
home
. Let's begin by looking at the advantages. One of the main positives of working at
home
 is that it saves time. What I mean by
this
 is that if
people's
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the people's home
home
 was far away from their
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
, they would
lost
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lose
 many
time
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times
 to get there.And we are living now technologies century
,
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,
so in
this
 century "Time is money." Another advantage of telecommuting
,
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,
you do not need to seek for
convenient place
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a convenient place
 to work. If we look another side
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of
this
,
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,
you do not need to spend extra investment for creating
convenient
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convenience
. Turning to the other side of the argument, communicating and forming friendship is useful for people. I mean exchanging your ideas and experience helps people
to
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in
 their life and work.
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Another
 drawback is that working at
home
 sometimes is really boring. While you are at
home you
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home, you
 do not see or meet a new
people
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person
 and stressful. All things considered, telecommuting makes you feel
sense
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a sense
the sense
 of isolation from the community. And I think its drawback is
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outweighed
outweighing
 its advantage sides.Personally, I believe that working
at
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in
 offices is better than working at
home
.

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