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Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting.

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In order to be a great human being in
future
Suggestion
the future
, a child should be raised with great moral standards at home. The topic whether women or men get a major role in raising the children is a huge debate nowadays. I think
both
 of the parents share equal credit in raising kids. Let’s ponder on the advantages on
both
 sides. Primarily, women are often treated as great caretakers and
also
 the one for great
future
 of the kids. Children spend a major chunk of their time with their mums. So, women get to teach kids
on
Suggestion
about
 how to be a better person in the society and
also
 on how to be a great human being. She provides nutritious foods to the children which help them to become healthy. Children learn about how to take care of others from their mums because mothers always take good care of their children.
This
 instils a great sense of responsibility in the children. Secondarily, men (father) are termed as their ideal person for children. Men always struggle so much in order to win bread for the family.
This
 struggle teaches kids to study better with a dream to help the family financially in
future
. Fathers are often a source of inspiration for children on how to be a strong and
better person
Suggestion
a better person
 in life.
This
 helps them to grow as better and responsible citizens in
future
Suggestion
the future
. After looking at advantages from
both
 sides of the argument, I conclude that
both
 men and women share equal proportion in raising the children. Even if the proportion is not balanced, there will be a huge impact on the children. So
both
father
Suggestion
fathers
 and mothers hold a major role in the family.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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