In most parts of the world people are living longer. What are the possible causes of this situation? Is this a negative or positive development?

In recent years, people's age is increasing in almost countries and there are reasons behind
this
trend. In my view,
this
issue brings more benefits than disadvantages
for
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to
society.
First
, the strong
development
of medicine, especially the invention of the vaccine to prevent most diseases that has significantly contributed to the increased
life
expectancy. In these days, when children are born, they are vaccinated with many vaccines to prevent many diseases throughout their lives.
For example
, tetanus, chicken pox, rubella, ...
Second
, the outstanding
development
of cutting-edge technology treatment techniques so that it increases the accuracy of diagnosis and the success rate for surgeries, as transcranial Doppler
celtrasound
, positioning system applications in brain
tumor
an abnormal new mass of tissue that serves no purpose
tumour
surgery, ... Futhermore, better social security in which the care for the elderly has been increasing attention so that
this
reason has helped people to live longer. So the reasons mentioned above bring a happy
life
, since those who
is being enjoy
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is enjoying
enjoying
enjoys
longer
life
with their families, make contributions to social progress.
That is
not to say that the trend will be beneficial. Because of increased
life
expectancy means a large population, as well as an increase in the proportion of people who outside the working age and rely on welfare system so that
this
problem becomes a burden and a restriction to the
development
of poor countries. In conclusion, the increase in human
life
expectancy is positive or negative rely on the
development
of each nation.
This
means that
for
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in
countries where high-income citizens who have accumulated retirement savings and
been
the state or fact of existing
being
able to afford high-end health care service,
that is
a positive phenomenon.
In contrast
, it is a difficult problem for poor countries, which have little national budget and have to pay social welfare for non-working-age citizens whose numbers are increasing. Regardless of
case
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the case
, the longevity of the people
represent
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represents
the
development
of a society worth living.
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