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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree?

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To begin
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 with, Most Countries have
free
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a free health care system, but
a free health care system but
health
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 care
system
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 but to what extend is
this
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system
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 able to
carter
give what is desired or needed, especially support, food or sustenance
cater
 for emergencies and new emerging diseases and human sicknesses. Undoubtedly, the
healthcare
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health care
system
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 in most countries only
carter
give what is desired or needed, especially support, food or sustenance
cater
 for basic
health
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 needs of the
people but
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people, but
 may not be able to handle complicated
health
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 needs of the people which may be expensive to provide for free by the government of any country.
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, every human in a country deserves to have access to both basic and latest medical
treatment
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treatments
.
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Also
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Also, this
this
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 should be the focus of any government asides free education and the cost should be built into yearly budgets of countries. Admittedly,
this
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 would increase the capital and recurrent expenditure assigned to
health
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 care by the
government but
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government, but
this
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 should not deter the provision because it has to do with human life which should be valued. To conclude
, I agree every
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, I agree with every
 human should have access to free
health
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 care
system
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 to enhance their span of living.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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