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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In many countries, many people believe that the hefty amount of money should spend on building new railway lines for speedy trains between the cities. While others think the present public transportation
system
 should be improved,
although
 improvement in the current
system
 will bring many benefits.
However
, I believe fast trains are becoming one the necessity of today's life because it saves
time
 and the environment- friendly. On the one hand, some people think that improving the existing transportation
system
 is more important than developing new
railways
Suggestion
railway
 lines because many people are already using them. People need more buses, an additional lane on roads, and reducing the fares
instead
. According to them, many people are using the current
transport
Suggestion
transportation
system
, and by taking above mentioned steps,
this
 will bring ease to their lives.
For instance
, they can reach their destination timely, can get space to sit, and become economical for them.
However
, I believe that these benefits are temporary measures for the commute.
On the other hand
, the ultimate need is the fast speedy trains. Transportation systems become advance these days, bullet trains have been introduced, and the world is following
this
 trend. The benefit of
this
 modern
system
 is supremely
time
 saving
with
Suggestion
in
most fuel
Suggestion
the most fuel
-efficient. The buses and cars are the primary sources of air pollutions which are harmful to health, thereby it should be reduced, and people should move to the trains for their health. When people spend their commuting
time
 on the road, they put their health at risk;
therefore
, it should be dealt appropriately. To conclude,
although
 many people are used to the road transport
system
; now the
time
 is changing, and I believe the new fast trains
is
Suggestion
are
 the need of today, which will save
time
 and help to create a pollution-free atmosphere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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