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Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free in their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some people that working people should wear their uniforms while others think that people are to do what they want to do.I think every worker should wear their
uniform
 which will help them to be disciplined and it will be easier for others to identify them as a worker. People recommend workers should wear
particular
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a particular uniform
uniform
 provided by their employers.
This
 is a good approach to teach discipline to workers
for example
, if they are not wearing uniforms, they are not allowed to work until they use their uniforms.
As a result
,
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,
they will understand that breaking any rules will have consequences which will push them to obey rules and it will create a wonderful working
environment
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Environment
.
Moreover
,
uniform
 can be identical.
For instance
,
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,
when a worker is working in a big
departmental
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department
 store and wearing no identical outfit
,
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,
it will be difficult for customers to differentiate between other customers and workers when they need help.
Thus
 the workers should wear their uniforms so that they can be helpful while their help is needed. Though
uniform
 is necessary for the workers
,
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,
some people think that every person should have their own choices to make.Workers have their rights to
not to wear
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don't wear
 any particular outfit for their working places because as a human being it's our right to do what we want to do. To conclude
,
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,
Workers are free to choose whether they are willing to wear
uniform
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uniforms
 or
not but
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not, but
 I think wearing
an
Suggestion
a
uniform
 is not only a choice to make but
also
 a way to show their commitment to their workplaces by being a well disciplined employee.

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