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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages?"

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The world we live in today is experiencing a high rate of increase in population.
This
 factor has given birth to the idea of family planning, where
coulples
a pair who associate with one another
couples
cables
 tend to downsize the number of children they intend giving birth to so they can give them quality life.
However
, there are
also
 demerits of having smaller families than larger families. The need for having a more conserved number of family members gives opportunity for every member of the family to live better than members of a crowded family. My point is that
the fewer
Suggestion
fewer
 people are in a family, the more distribution of family resources
for example
.
Accept space
.
 A couple with two children can easily send their wards to a more expensive and better school compared to parents of five children.
Similarly
, the smaller family will spend less on feeding and have extra for savings.
Additionally
, children from smaller homes tend to be more reserved in nature and better behaved as their parents would have more time to give them one on one training.
On the other hand
, there is a plus for most African families who are characterized
with
Suggestion
by
 a large number of members because they have
strength
Suggestion
the strength
. A large family
give
Suggestion
gives
chance
Suggestion
a chance
 for
division
Suggestion
the division
 of labour when it comes to work.
For example
, a farmer with many children has less to worry about over manpower compared to another family with less members who may have to hire labour.
Furthermore
, larger families have an advantage of members not experiencing loneliness unlike the smaller families. In conclusion,
although
 smaller families have some reasonable high points over the larger families, we still cannot shelve aside the low points like
loneliness
Suggestion
the loneliness
 of children from
such
 families which often lead to withdrawal or Loss of confidence.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Global citizenship
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Cutting-edge facilities
  • Networking opportunities
  • Career advancement
  • Financial constraints
  • Acclimatization challenges
  • Support network
  • Educational disparity
  • Reverse culture shock
  • Bilingualism
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