Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that travelling is the best way to learn about the culture and tradition of a foreign county,

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, I firmly believe that we can

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learn about other countries with the help of Internet and Television. On the one hand, few people feel that vi

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o a different country allows us to get practical experience about their places, foods and local people, which is simply not possible by visiting a website or reading a book. A book and website can provide us with

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people, which

nable us to get a deep understanding of that particular region.

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, it is often seen that some stories and

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shared by a few media houses are not always correct, so travelling provides us an opportunity to validate the reality.

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recent scenario where many foreign news channels spread incorrect

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about Kasmir and claimed that it is unsafe to visit th

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hen few foreign tourists visited there they had an entirely different experience and they found the place very peaceful.

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, there are some people strongly feel that one can learn about other countries culture and traditions with the help of technology

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as the Internet and Television and I

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view. The Internet can give us a chance to get a vast amount of

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written by eminent people about the food and habits of people.

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gives us a platform to chat with people who live thousands of miles away from us without. vi

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, a recent study has indicated that more than 100 million people talk to people who are from a totally different region and cultural backgrounds. In conclusion, many people prefer to visit a county to know about their customs and traditions,

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elieve that one can get an ample amount of knowledge by using technology.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

345 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cultural immersion
Interactions
Tourism
Local economies
Cross-cultural understanding
Carbon emissions
Accessibility
Diverse perspectives
Authenticity
Reliability
Virtual reality
Immersive experiences

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Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and the internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well managed. Whta are the advantages and disadvantages?

Buying things on the internet such as book, air ticket and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons and include examples.