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Some people believe that robots will replace classroom teacher in the near future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that human
teachers
 will be replaced by
the
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artificially intelligent
teachers
 in the foreseeable future.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement because of various factors. At the outset, the prediction of the replacement of
teachers
 by robots would not be possible because of unnecessary investments. To hire the services of advanced robotic technologies, a big chunk of money will be required.
Nonetheless
, human educators will be available at relatively cheaper wages.
Moreover
, robotic
teachers
 might
be suffered
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 from a lack of flexibility. It is because they would not be able to understand the emotional state of their students. Having controlled by their internal processor, these machines could deliver longer lectures without accessing the learner's interest level.
For instance
, contemporary scientists are still struggling to inculcate emotional intelligence in robots.
Furthermore
, there will be a human resource problem with the introduction of robot
teachers
 in the institutes.
As if
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 all the teaching work
will be
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 taken from
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machines, there may be unemployment problems for humans.
For instance
, the revolution of automatic machinery in factories caused
such
 a scenario during the 1960s. What is more, pupils may not outperform
due to
 less interest in their
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this
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approach. It is witnessed that students perform better in their curriculum, where they have a mutual understanding with providers. By opening their hearts to their
teachers
, they can grasp the knowledge efficiently. Varying grades in academic subjects are a good example of
its
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 that depicts the effectiveness of interest level in a particular teacher that would not be possible in
case
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 of A.I. Robots. In conclusion, it is argued that the need for human
teachers
 will be demolished
due to
 Robot tutors.
Nevertheless
,
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factors
such
 as cost, rigid teaching methods, unemployment and
low-interest
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 levels are the main
reason
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reasons
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 for my disagreement with the above-said notion.tion.

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