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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Improvements in modern technology will help in eradicating environmental issues faced by our planet. While most developments have positive intentions, I believe that technological advancements is not the ultimate solution.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons for and against using technology as a
bandaid
an armed thief who is (usually) a member of a band
bandit
band aid
.
Firstly
, it is scientifically known that mother nature has miraculous self-healing properties. If mankind is able to stop all human activities that are damaging to our habitat, she will be able to repair herself through time.
Secondly
,
such
 technological leaps comes at a cost of our earth's resources. Materials and minerals have to be mined and refined and
this
 process contributes greatly to air pollution.
Therefore
, our atmosphere receives more bad deposits before it actually has the chance to repair itself. Technology cannot solve the holes made in our ozone layer and undo the glaciers that are melting in the far north. Having said that, there are some ways that
this
haemorrage
the flow of blood from a ruptured blood vessel
haemorrhage
 can be mitigated. Recent innovations have brought about the launch of electric or hybrid cars. By reducing the amount of harmful gases being emitted, we are halting the decline of our planet.
In addition
, with our
society plaing
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society, placing
society placing
 more emphasis on going paperless, more trees can be saved, thereby conserving the dwellings we live in. In conclusion, I believe that technology can improve
conditions but
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conditions, but
 it cannot bring it back to where mother nature once was as these
damges
a sum of money paid in compensation for loss or injury
damages
 take a long time to recover. It is ultimately mankind's responsibility to reduce, reuse and recycle whenever and wherever possible.
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