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When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #appearance
When designing a building, the intended use of the building is considered important than the outward
appearance
. In
this
 passage I will discuss why I disagree with the aforementioned.
Asthetical
Suggestion
The aesthetical appearance
Aesthetical appearance
appearance
 of
anything be
Suggestion
anything, is
anything is
 it buildings, cars or houses are always considered important as it gives
first impression
Suggestion
the first impression
 to the person viewing it.
Although
 many would disagree with
this but
Accept comma addition
this, but
 statistics have proved that people wants to show how fancy is they live;
furthermore they
Accept comma addition
furthermore, they
also
 want to have the interior well done as to serve their purpose of building the structure. As we are moving to
future
Suggestion
the future
, there has been a great demand on the
appearance
 of the buildings,
for example
, the Burj Khalifa or Burj-al-
arab
a member of a Semitic people originally from the Arabian peninsula and surrounding territories who speaks Arabic and who inhabits much of the Middle East and northern Africa
Arab
 for that matter. These buildings are not just serving
purpose
Suggestion
the purpose
a purpose
to
Suggestion
for
of
 their intended
use but
Accept comma addition
use, but
also
 are a tourist attraction.
Hence
, I disagree that when designing a building, the most important factor to consider is the intended use rather than its outward
appearance
.
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