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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#computer #effects #children
In
this
 modern era,
computer
 is
very important part
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a very important part
in
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of
 every individual
life
.
Computer
 without
life
 is not possible
.
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.
 Because there are many things available on the
computer
 like studies
,
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,
business
etcetera
.
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.
Computer
 using have a negative than positive effect on
children mind
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a child's mind
child's mind
the child's mind
.
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.
 In
this
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
easy
issue
,
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,
 I agree with
this views
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this view
these views
 and the main point discuss in the upcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with, there are several types of views regarding negative effects of
computer
. The
first
 view is, in present
time
, children do not concentrate the
studdies
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
studies
 relatives and other work
.
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.
because
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Because
majority
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the majority
 of children everyday spend
time
 on the
computer
. In
a
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an
 addition
,
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,
 there are countless children use the
computer
 and watch the video and suffer from eyesight and cancer. To commence with, there
are
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is
 a lot of views regarding negative effects on
computer
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the computer
a computer
. The
second
 view is many children
everyday
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every day
 spend
time
 on
computer
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the computer
computers
 playing games like racing cars
,
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,
temple run
,
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,
and many more. Because children don't growth of height and not stress free
.
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.
 Along with
this
, children do not encourage of health. Because health is very essential part in
children
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child
life
.
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.
For instance
 My cousin many spend
time
 on
computer
 like playing games and suffer from the eyesight. On the other hand
,
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,
 there are many types of views regarding
positive effect
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the positive effect
 of
computer
. In present
time
,
computer
 is very imperative part
in
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of
 every individual
life
.
Because
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Available
children easily to gai
n
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,
lot of
knowled
ge
such
 as studies, jobs through
computer
 Addiontially,
computer
 different types of other languages available like France, English,Spanish etceter

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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