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İn your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars?

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Nowadays there are many systems in order to
transporting
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transport
 and these systems
provides
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are provided
 with many vehicles to
transporting
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transport
. These vehicles would say
what
stay in one place and anticipate or expect something
wait
 for
air way
a duct that provides ventilation (as in mines)
airway
 to planes, for surface to cars-automobiles or trains and
lastly
 for over the sea
to
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in
with
 ships. İn these vehicles the most innovative and handy in many aspects is automobiles. Because automobiles
more cheap
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cheaper
, more comfortable and more handy in our life conditions
However when
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However, when
 the
last
century we
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century, we
 see some situations, one of them decreasing petrol and gas sources and
this
 case caused find
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 other ways for cars. When we look today automobile technology show that the most
appropraite
suitable for a particular person or place or condition etc
appropriate
 and useful way is
electric car system
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an electric car system
the electric car system
.Because electric cars ensure keep clean our
air
 space and
environment
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environmental
 conditions as without exhaust and greenhouse gas.
Besides nowadays
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Besides, nowadays
 producing electric easily than out of the petrol and gas that the most significant factor for about being appropriate and
benefit
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beneficial
. These reasons governments
should tends
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should tend
 to give incentives to their citizens about
embrace
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to embrace
embracing
 electric cars. These incentives would be in many fields
such
 as about tax the electric car’s. Keep of the most less level of electric car tax and being high
of
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on
 gas-powered
cars
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car
 tax
would be ensure
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would ensure
 that embracing electric cars.
Besides
 becoming
approprite cost
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an appropriate cost
appropriate cost
 of
electric
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electricity
 for just electric cars provide the citizens experience that more economic transporting. As well as
person
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people
the person
a person
 who use the electric car contribute as keep clean to
environment
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the environment
 and
air
 pollution.
Last
 but not least, governments and executives on the state should be involve these incentives in the regulations and in the state
politicies
social relations involving intrigue to gain authority or power
politics
. Because
this
 app is crucial for our economic life
standart
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
standards
 and our future with as supply keep clean environment conditions and
air
 space. As a conclusion, in my opinion governments should consider that future of
automobiles
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automobile
 technology and
in addition
 to consider
this
opininon
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
 that electric cars will help to reduce exhaust and greenhouse gases. All of these reasons eventually, governments should give incentives to their citizens in order to more people to embrace electric cars.
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