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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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 information about the sale of
coffee
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 and
banana
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 in five
european
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countries
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during
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 1999 and 2004. Units are measured in millions of
euros
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.
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, the amount of
coffee
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 sold increased in 2004 as compared to 1999 for all
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five
countries
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.
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, the amount of
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banana
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bananas
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 sold decreased in Sweden and Denmark and rose
for
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 all the other
countries
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. The greatest disparity can be seen in
UK
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the UK
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where by
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 the year 2004, the
sales
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 of
coffee
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 increased by nearly 14 times.
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, The
sales
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 increased by 3
million
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euros
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 in
switzerland
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 and by 0.7
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euros
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 in Belgium. The least amount of growth is in Denmark and Sweden where
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coffee
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sales
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 saw a mere increment of 0.2
million
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euros
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 during
this
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5 year
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 period. Switzerland saw the most profit in
banana
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sales
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 as by 2004, the
banana
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sales
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 grew 3 times. UK and Belgium
banana
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sales
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 increased by 4.5
million
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euros
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 and 3.4
million
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euros
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 respectively.
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, Sweden and Denmark were the only
countries
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 where
banana
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sales
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 declined by nearly half.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, banana, countries, euros, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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