Some people believe that to be a successful sportsman, one needs to have a natural ability. Others think that hard work and practice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

One of c
ontroversial issues
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the controversial issues
among people is, what is the most important factor for being a prosperous sportsman. Some people believe that a natural
ability
is the most effective key.
On the other hand
, there is a concept that h
ardworking
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hard working
and practicing could be b
etter way
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a better way
f
or
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of
reaching
this
goal. In my opinion, hardworking is the most important f
actor
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factor, however
however
, I
also
believe that our inherent
ability
could be helpful
also
. Obviously, having a hereditary
ability
which comes from family and ancestors help us for being s
uccessful
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successful, for
for e
xample it
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example, it
can be clearly seen in many cases, people with an athlete member in their family have more chance for being successful in different sport fields compared with one who has not. Because they can see more experiences and using them
besides
genetics.
For example
an a
thlete father
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athlete, father
can move his interests to their children by doing e
xercise
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exercises
in front of them. Hardworking and doing exercise are two vital things which improving you to higher levels.
For example
, for a football player is important to learn skills and make strong his muscles by playing football and doing exercise more and more. Many of known football players had no sportsman in their family and they became successful. In conclusion,
Although
the heritage is an important factor for being a successful s
portsman but
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sportsman, but
without practice and diligence it is infeasible. So, If you b
e
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are
are being
a hardworking p
erson maybe
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person, maybe
you can be a prosperous athlete but it’s not possible contrariwise. In my view, practicing is more important than natural
ability
. Roya Safa

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