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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#convenience #foods #methods #food #preparation
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World
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The world
 has undergone a great change where people are changing habits based on their
convenience
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. Indeed, cultural
food
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, once used to be an
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
 label, has been replaced with ready to eat meals. To a certain extent, I agree that conventional
food
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 is preferred to traditional
food
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.
However
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, I
also
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 believe that processed
food
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 will not be prevalent. It is unquestionable that
food
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 advertisements and busy life are two diverting factors to choose ready to eat
food
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. Time is
on
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in
 the wings and people have less time to spend on cooking,
thus
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, advertisements
is
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are
 on the go for
convenience
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fod
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
foods
. Many people get attracted and are motivated to replace the option of
food
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 preparation. Government needs to start alerting people of how dangerous is eating.
Government
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The government
 must show the importance of the consumption of traditional
food
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 daily. In order to inform people that the lack of vitamins and nutrients can mess with their
health
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, government can start programs to encourage people to feed themselves better.
On the other hand
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,
convenience
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food
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 might be on the top list,
although
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, it will not
throughly
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
 replaced the traditional
food
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. In reality almost 50% of world population are
health
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 conscious. It is proved in many research videos that processed
food
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 can be a high risk to
health
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.
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, in India,
whole society
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the whole society
 is proud of their traditional
food
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 and many
convenience
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food
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 companies have been unsuccessful as people of India have negative perceptions for
processed
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processing
food
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 and they love to prepare their traditional foods. In conclusion, for reasons mentioned above,
convenience
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food
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 is prioritized due to the marketing attraction and lack of time to spend on cooking,
in contrast
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, it will never distract the mind of people who are more concerned about their
health
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.
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