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Immigration has major impact on society .What are the main reason of immigration.

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Immigration has
signifucant
important in effect or meaning
significant
 impact on contemporary society. Each
year more
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year, more
 and more people
move
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 from their home countries to developed countries.It may bring positive as well as negative influences.In
this
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esaay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 we will discuss about' why people migrate and what are the consequences of
this
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 immigration. In my opinion
,
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,
most of the people
move
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 from their
third
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country
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 to developed
country
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 in search of security and safe future.A developed
country
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 with his stable economy has lesser chance
in
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on
of
 losing the saving of
pupil
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the pupil
pupils
..Most
refugee
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refugees
move
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 to get a better job opportunities with high salaries.Sometimes the threat of war and some cultural conflicts
also
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 force the whole families to cross the border.People leave their
country
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 in making a bright and safe future for their
childre
a young person of either sex
children
child
.
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hand when
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hand, when
 people
move
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 to their destination
country
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, due to lack of
comminication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
 skills they can't get a job.Some people are highly qualified they are not able to attain a
job according
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job, according
 to their skills and qualification. So it leads to a disappointment.Over population can create many
problem
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problems
 for the
govrment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
.People cannot receive the proper
residenc
any address at which you dwell more than temporarily
residence
,
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,
food and health care even across the border. In
concusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
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,
people
move
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 to other countries for
best
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better
 future prospects.It may lead to a serious
problems
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problem
 for the refugees.So a decision should be made by knowing all the facts.
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