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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

#people #computer #telephone #job #home
It is certainly true that everyone
have
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has
 their own electric device
such
 as computer and telephone, which helps to do
job
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a job
jobs
 at
home
, nowadays.
However
,
this
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss about the merits of working at
home
 in the
first
peragraph
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraph
 and
then
 it will concentrate on its negative effects in the subsequent paragraph. There are some advantages of working
in
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from
 own
home
.
First
 and foremost merit which comes to my mind is " saving
time
 ". To put it simply, people waste their
time
 to reach their working place, if they
work
 at
home
, human beings can easily save their
time
 because they do not need to go another place for doing
work
 owing to computers as well as telephones. Another merit to consider is that if a person doing
work
 at
home
, one can do some funny activities when he feel bored and spend own quality of
time
 with their family.
On the other hand
, there are few disadvantages
also
.
Firstly
, if
individual
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the individual
an individual
do
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does work
work
 at own
home
, one can
do not
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do, not
 concentrate on office
work
 as a proper way because family members are disturbing to a person when he do
work
.
Secondly
, one cannot follow the instructions of their seniors when he
work
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works
 at
home
 as well as do not
learnt
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learn
 about discipline.
Finally
, it is very necessary to
creat
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
create
environment according
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environment, according
 to
work
 for concentrating on
work
. For
examply
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, employees
are do
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are doing
do
have done
work
 efficiently when they
work
 at
office
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the office
an office
 with the presence of their employer. As
such it
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such, it
 can be concluded that
although
 working at
home
 is
become
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becoming
 popular
,
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,
thesedays
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these days
 and it is beneficial for worker to save
time
 and spend
time
 with their
family but
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family, but
 due to
this
peolpe
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person
people
 facing some problems
such
 as they do not concentrate on their
work
 and do not follow the rule and regulations.
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