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Some people prefer living in a house while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in an apartment?

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It is irrefutable that majority of masses give more preference to live in a house while opponents feel that the advantage of living in an
apartment
 is more.
However
, the disadvantages of living in an
apartment
 overweight the advantages. There are
number
Suggestion
a number
 of demerits to live in an
apartment
.
First
 and foremost disadvantage is that people facing some
fanincial
involving financial matters
financial
 problem when they stay in an
apartment
 due to their poor
fanincial
involving financial matters
financial
 condition. A
best
Suggestion
good
 illustration is that my uncle who is living in an
apartment
,
Accept space
,
 face many financial problems to pay the rent of
apartment
Suggestion
apartments
the apartment
an apartment
.
Secondly
, if people living in an
apartment
,
then
 they
facing
Suggestion
are facing
face
 problem related to space because due to
modern era
Suggestion
the modern era
, the rent of enough space is very
high so
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high, so
mostly
Suggestion
most
 people avoid
such
 types of places and give more preference to manage with little space.
Moreover
, when human beings living
such
 types of
place
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place, then
then
 they
do not doing
Suggestion
do not do
don't do
are not doing
aren't doing
have not done
haven't done
 activity with freedom.
On the other hand
, living in an
apartment
 is beneficial in some ways.
Furthermore
, people can easily go for their work as well as their study purpose when they live in an
apartment
 because they can easily get an
apartment
 which is near of their work place.
For example
, in Bathinda many students are living in an
apartment
 for doing their education. As
such it
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such, it
 can be concluded that,
aulthough
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 people give more preference to live in an
apartment
,
Accept space
,
 I would like to reiterate the trend of living in an
apartment
 can be considered is not more beneficial.
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  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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