TOPIC: Nowadays, some people like to give help to the local community or provide people with direct help. Other people prefer to give money to national and international organizations. Discuss both methods and give your own opinion on which is better.

Some people prefer to donate native communities or directly
support
underprivileged people, whereas other people do
charity
in bigger scales. Basically, each
method
owns benefits aims
to
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for
a better society, but the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
method
is more outstanding than the former ones. The local
charity
that source of
support
is quantitatively limited immediately impacts the people received help. Citizens directly provide help to their local charitable organizations, but there is always
restriction
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restricted
in a number of citizens who are willing to give away.
Hence
, the amount of local
support
is not abundant all the time.
Additionally
, because of the direct giving, the residents can receive immediately the help without long time to wait that means
this
method
timely satisfies the needs of the miserable people. Canteen,
for example
, which provides non-charged food just supplies for
certain amount
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a certain amount
of food and for
certain number
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a certain number
of people per day.
In contrast
, national or international organizations can solve big issues: national dilemma and global headache with plentiful
support
. The financial source of these organizations comes from all
corner
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corners
of the world, so it apparently is larger than the budget of local charitable entities.
Besides
, the national and international organizations concentrate on problems which are necessary to handle, affect
economic development
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the economic development
of the world.
Thus
, supporting for these organizations can solve the global emergency crisis that the local
charity
cannot carry, brings positive effect to everyone on the world.
Unicef
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UNICEF
,
for example
, appeal people to
support
financially in order to
conducting
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conduct
its necessary measures. Fundamentally, each
method
contains distinctive subjects to affect and both methods target good results. The national or international
charity
is still preferred because of its the possible of solutions.
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