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the graph and table below given information about water use worldwide and consumption in two different countries.

the graph and table below given information about water use worldwide and consumption in two different countries.
#information #water #consumption #two #countries
the given graph
demonstrate
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that
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the global
water
 used by fields and the table illustrate
water
 consumption
i
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 brazil and congo in 2000 .
i
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shall
shal
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will
 discuss my thoughts
all
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about it in
next
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 upcoming paragraphs first and foremost,the global
water
 utilized by industrial and
domestics
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domestic
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were
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 around equally from
year
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the year
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 1900 to 1940 but in 1950,the industrial sector consumed more
water
 as compared to
domestic
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the domestic
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 in 1970 . industrial sector used five hundred
kilometer
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kilometre
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 cube and it reached till 1,000km in
year
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the year
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 2000 but
domestic
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the domestic
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 area consumed
water
 only the agriculture department was half of one thousand
kilometer
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kilometre
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 cube in 1900 it was gradually increased till 1940 but after 1950 it was rapidly increased in 1980 and 1990
at
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last
 it reached 3,ooo
km
 in
year
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the year
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 2000 on other hand ,
water
 consumption by population ,
irriquated
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irrigated
 land and person was
176million
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176 million
, 26500km and 359m respectively.
furthermore
,in
country
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the country
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congo
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the congo
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 population use
water
 5.2 million,
irriquated
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irrigated
 land consumed
water
 100km and
water
consuption
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consumption
by
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per
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person
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the person
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 was 8m in
year
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the year
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 2000. To put it in a
nutshall
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nutshell
,
i
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 pen down saying that . agriculture had consumed more
water
 as compared to others and the domestic field used
least
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the least
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water
in
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every
year
.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, year, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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