Many young children today leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. Why is this happening? What can be done to encourage young people to have a positive attitude towards learning?

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Education is an important part of one's life, even in the ancient times children go to
schools
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school
to get
education
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an education
which will help them in
thier
of them or themselves
their
future life. With the evaluation of technology children these days are spending more of their time with smart gadgets and are less
focusing
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focused
on good books. With the easy
availablitiy
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
of information on Google there are very less people today using Encyclopedia to extract information. Technology is getting evolved so fast that even the learning methodology has
changed but
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changed, but
schools today are still focusing on old and proven methods of teaching.
This
is a major factor why children have a negative impact of schools. Many schools have not changed
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
coursework from past many years and
this
old coursework has very less or no practical approach to
learn
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learning
. Today's generation children are having a practical mindset rather than a
theoratical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
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theoretically
vertical
once and
school
syllabus still
focus
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focuses
on
theoratical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
aspects.
School
need to make changes if they want children to have a positive impact towards schools and the
first
thing is to teach children what they want to learn rather than
teavhing
the profession of a teacher
teaching
them everything. A child who
love
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loves
sports should
spent
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spend
more time on learning that
instead
of spending time on learning world history.
Also
schools should provide more practical things and let children involve in small tasks which help them
learning
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learn
to learn
concepts rather than teaching them just
theory
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a theory
with books. Children today want to come out of that
school
rooms and like to learn from outside, so
school
should change their syllabus
accordingly
.
Also
providing more
projects
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project
work and
juding
exerting control or influence
guiding
judging
guarding
students based on that rather than
theoratical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
vertical
theoretically
paper based exams will let students get attracted towards schools. In conclusion, Technology advancement has changed
mindset
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the mindset
of children and to make them love to attend
school
, it is required that schools should change in
way
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the way
of their teaching and focus more on practical learning.

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