Some people believe that the radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. Do you agree?

Entertainment playing a key role in current scenario. They often watch their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
networks in
television but
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television, but
before
radio
will be the only source which was
using
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used
for gathering news about the world. People are thinking that
radio
will be
the more enjoyable
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more enjoyable
than
compare
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comparable
to the Tv
.
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.
I denied to
this
, because
television
has more advantages than audio device.
Firstly
, I believed that we can enjoy more while watching to a news rather than listening. There is some impact on our brain while watching
visuals
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the visuals
. It directly stored in our brain and we can easily imagine
this
situation.
For
example if
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example, if
we are explaining a situation which we have seen before
in
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on
TV
.
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.
it
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It
is easy to describe that incident very clearly to listeners. Only listening cannot help to achieve in explaining.
Radio
can help only to know the
information but
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information, but
this
television
can help to analyse the information. The main advantage
for
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of
this
is easy to operate and gives more entertainment.
However
, in present situation enjoyment is merely depends on
TV
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the TV
. Everyone forget about the
radio
and addicted to
this
. It becomes an interface between human and enjoyment. Unknown things are known by using these type of devices. On the other side, in earlier, one device is mainly used for entertainment which is currently known as
radio
. It is the main source for
there
of them or themselves
their
enjoyment.
However
, using
this
we will face some challenges like it's frequency which means rapidly we have to change it before using it. We can enjoy only by
listening but
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listening, but
we cannot know about
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
images and visuals. To conclude, each argument has each
explanation but
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explanation, but
I believed that
watching
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Watching
television
gives more enjoyable than than the
radio
.
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