Some people believe that the radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. Do you agree?

#people #radio #tv

Entertainment playing a key role in current scenario. They often watch their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

networks in

television but

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television, but

before

radio

will be the only source which was

using

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used

for gathering news about the world. People are thinking that

radio

will be

the more enjoyable

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more enjoyable

than

compare

Suggestion

comparable

to the Tv

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I denied to

this

, because

television

has more advantages than audio device.

Firstly

, I believed that we can enjoy more while watching to a news rather than listening. There is some impact on our brain while watching

visuals

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the visuals

. It directly stored in our brain and we can easily imagine

this

situation.

For

example if

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example, if

we are explaining a situation which we have seen before

Suggestion

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Suggestion

is easy to describe that incident very clearly to listeners. Only listening cannot help to achieve in explaining.

Radio

can help only to know the

information but

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information, but

this

television

can help to analyse the information. The main advantage

for

Suggestion

this

is easy to operate and gives more entertainment.

However

, in present situation enjoyment is merely depends on

Suggestion

the TV

. Everyone forget about the

radio

and addicted to

this

. It becomes an interface between human and enjoyment. Unknown things are known by using these type of devices. On the other side, in earlier, one device is mainly used for entertainment which is currently known as

radio

. It is the main source for

there

of them or themselves

their

enjoyment.

However

, using

this

we will face some challenges like it's frequency which means rapidly we have to change it before using it. We can enjoy only by

listening but

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listening, but

we cannot know about

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

images and visuals. To conclude, each argument has each

explanation but

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explanation, but

I believed that

watching

Suggestion

Watching

television

gives more enjoyable than than the

radio

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people says that art (painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can only be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.