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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Currently,
this
 is
common
Suggestion
more common
 that
both
 men and women do permanent job in many nations. So, they
both
 should help each other in their household
work
. I totally agree with
this
 opinion because it helps
both
 to reduce
work
-stress in
office
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the office
 as well as make
positive impact
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a positive impact
 on
children perspective
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a child's perspective
child's perspective
the child's perspective
children's perspective
. The main reason why I believe to divide domestic
work
 into husband and wife because it gives them to be
relax
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relaxed
 after the
office
 time. It reduces the mental pressure of
office
. They get time to be
think
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thinking
 about themselves to be relaxed.
For example
, if husband helps in cooking, wife can do other
work
 at home. It helps them to spend family time together creates strong family tie.
In addition
, dividing
household
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the household work
work
 into men and women helps them to enhance the ability to
work
 effectively
at
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in
office
 and make them more capable in
work place
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the work place
. Another reason why I support the notion that sharing the
home
preparatory school work done outside school (especially at home)
homework
work
 impact on children aspect and attitude. They learn to show mutual respect to others from their childhood. It teaches their moral and ethical value that can practice in their daily life.
For example
, it
also
 helps them to be more caring and sharing with their siblings and classmate. In conclusion, I completely agree that sharing domestic
work
 because it increases
work
 efficiency of
both
 men and women, and it will teach us to show respect one another. Given that situation, it seems that everyone should help others in their
work
 so that it can reduce
work load
work that a person is expected to do in a specified time
workload
 from one.

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