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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
current situation
Suggestion
the current situation
,
considerable amount
Suggestion
a considerable amount
 of
food
 items
are consumed
Suggestion
is consumed
 by people received from the farmhouses, located far away from the urban cities. Some Those who believe that
the better
Suggestion
the best
 way to support nature and a
cost
 effective way is to take diet only from local farmers. In my opinion,
this
 practice has more advantages than the disadvantages which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, the main merits of having locally harvested foodstuffs is that people can easily access and get at low price. Most of the
food
 products are growing in the rural areas and are always located far away from the urban cities.
Hence
, it required requires transportation to distribute the
food
 products to multiple cities from the farmhouse.
Moreover
,
this
 transportation is adding additional
cost
 to the product in a way of vehicle hire
cost
 and running
cost
, which obviously cannot bare borne by the producers.
For example
, most of the vegetables are imported from the in and around rural areas through containers and other mode of transportation facilities, which increase the product’s price.
On the other hand
, the demerits of consuming foodstuff from local growers is that, they cannot fulfil the needs of
current population
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the current population
. Most of the farming
areas
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area
area's
 crops (farmland)
has been converted
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have been converted
 to a living area due to increase in population.
Moreover
, land resource
has have been spoiled
Suggestion
has spoiled
has spoilt
 by humans with poor resource management systems. Overall, the required space for doing agriculture for the society becomes very small.
Finally
, the result is low production of
food
 products and increase in price creates demand in
market
Suggestion
the market
.
For example
, lands in urban areas are being used for construction constructing of with huge multi story buildings and provided with very less land space for agriculture. To conclude, consuming
locally produce
Suggestion
locally produces
food
 products supports nature and
cost
 effective than the imported from
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 location.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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