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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages

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There are many who have an opinion that monthly once should be free from four wheelers and
also
 no permission granted for the own board transports on the road.
This
 essay
firstly
discuss
Suggestion
discusses
 about the advantages and
then
 disadvantages of
this
practice
 (or phenomenon) On the one hand, the main advantage of the car-free
day
 is to make awareness between
people mind
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a person's mind
person's mind
peoples mind
 about the environment management system. While initiating
this
practice
every one
all people
everyone
 think about the purpose of
this
 activity and the root cause. On a
day
 the whole
transportation
 stops it gives a difference that how much silent that going to make and to breath with pure air and for the whole
day
 have the experience of traffic less free road.
For example
, Car-free
day
 for once in a month gets environment free from air and noise pollution On the advantages part of the
practice
 is people are free from the pollutions like air pollution and noise pollution and
this
 being a chance to have a physical
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
on
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of
 their
day
 to
day
 activity at least for once in
month
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a month
the month
 even if not in
practice
 regularly.
This
practice
encourage
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encourages
is encouraged
 the upcoming generation to learn how to support the environment, now a days everyone has the knowledge and understanding of the global warming and started supporting towards the improvement and
this
 kind of practices
also
 add value
On the other hand
, the disadvantage is that people
has
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have
 to bare of
transportation
 unavailability in any emergency situation. People
has
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have
 to plan their schedules well before, should not miss any important meetings. People have to keep required things in stock, in particularly on grocery and medicines. School children will suffer without
transportation
, parents
has
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have
 to make sure to reach school on time with
alternate mode
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alternate modes
the alternate mode
an alternate mode
 of transport. Goods and logistics get stocked heavily due to a
day
 off to
transportation
.
For example
, car-free
day
 being a risk for
public
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the public
 to reach hospital for any unexpected medical emergency.
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