The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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These days, people are falling ill due to

change

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changes

way

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the way

of life and

this

cannot be diagnosed by latest drugs. There are many who

believes

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believe

different method

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a different method

of remedies can help. I agree with the statement.

This

essay will

first

discuss, how latest drugs cannot support for permanent cure and

secondly

discuss, the side effects caused by it can be overcome by the different methods of treatment (

causes

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cause

side effect that can overcome by the different method of treatment)

To begin

with, people in

developed environment

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the developed environment

developed environments

changing their traditional way of living to

current situation

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the current situation

current situations

This

includes food habits, culture, sleeping timings etc.

people

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People

are consuming lot of junk foods and having late night sleep due to overseas projects, which increase cholesterol,

diabetic

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diabetes

and kidney problems. Medicines have to take

for

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the whole life to keep

this

illness under control and do not have a permanent cure.

For example

, diabetic patients have to take medicine or insulin to keep the sugar level under control for their whole life

In addition

to the above, taking modern medicines for

long time

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a long time

can cause other problems to health as a side

effects

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effect

which will reduce basic self-immune power of the human body.

For example

, when consuming antibiotic for continuous fever or cold will damage both bad cells and good cells – (need to give more explanation) In conclusion, owing to the fast growing development people are facing multiple problems. To diagnose and

treating

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treat

all health

issue

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issues

without any cause of additional problem and to have a permanent cure an alternate method is needed. I

thus

entirely agree with the statement

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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