The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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These days, people are falling ill due to

change

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changes

way

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the way

of life and

this

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cannot be diagnosed by latest drugs. There are many who

believes

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believe

different method

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a different method

of remedies can help. I agree with the statement.

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essay will

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discuss, how latest drugs cannot support for permanent cure and

secondly

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discuss, the side effects caused by it can be overcome by the different methods of treatment (

causes

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cause

side effect that can overcome by the different method of treatment)

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with, people in

developed environment

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the developed environment

developed environments

changing their traditional way of living to

current situation

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the current situation

current situations

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includes food habits, culture, sleeping timings etc.

people

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People

are consuming lot of junk foods and having late night sleep due to overseas projects, which increase cholesterol,

diabetic

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diabetes

and kidney problems. Medicines have to take

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the whole life to keep

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illness under control and do not have a permanent cure.

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, diabetic patients have to take medicine or insulin to keep the sugar level under control for their whole life

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to the above, taking modern medicines for

long time

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a long time

can cause other problems to health as a side

effects

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effect

which will reduce basic self-immune power of the human body.

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, when consuming antibiotic for continuous fever or cold will damage both bad cells and good cells – (need to give more explanation) In conclusion, owing to the fast growing development people are facing multiple problems. To diagnose and

treating

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treat

all health

issue

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issues

without any cause of additional problem and to have a permanent cure an alternate method is needed. I

thus

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entirely agree with the statement

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

268 words

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